Elevator Pitch Practice! (Part 2!)
Feedback: The feedback was helpful. Add more examples explaining the plan better, lighting to see better, more professional clothing.
Based on the feedback I went into a bit more depth explaining my pitch, I added more light for the camera to focus better. However I did not dress as well as before.
Brandon,
ReplyDeleteThis was a good pitch and it seems like you did improve on your last pitch. There are a few things that I would have liked to see that were different. One of them you already talked about and that was your outfit. Another thing that I wanted to see was a little bit longer of a pitch. I wanted to see this because I wanted to see the idea flushed out a little more so that I could get a better understanding of what you are trying to do and how it may work. Other than those few things I thought it was pretty good pitch. The use of your hands and body language was a good strategy that kept me engaged with the pitch. Good job.
Hey Brandon,
ReplyDeleteGreat job with the pitch. And this was a much for professional outfit and the setting was better as well. I will say that a longer pitch maybe better for you though. The idea you have is fair large and for people who don't really deal with glasses it may not be as easy to grasp. I will say that though you hand movement is great I thing it would have if you changed your tone of voice slightly. This is you sound every monotone, but I think by adding some enthusiasm into your tone that it would really help sell you idea.
Hey Brandon,
ReplyDeleteI liked this pitch better than the last one. you improved yourself! I would add more numbers and statistics to increase you credibility. Moreover, I think starting your pitch with something that can catch the audience's attention instead of your name would be better.I liked that you spoke calm and slow but I feel that the pitch was too short and did not answer all of my questions. Good post.